Our First in Depth Thriller Idea

There is a dying man lying on the floor with a knife in his stomach and blood on the floor and his stomach.   Standing above the dying man is a smaller man whose expression is very nervous/powerful the man is breathing heavily and you can hear this as the sound will be accentuated.   The standing man then hears a siren and flea’s the scene and hurdles a fence.   There is then a moment where it is quite obvious that we have gone back in time to see how this story happens.  there are two men who are playing a game of poker,  as they are talking the smaller man switches his low card to an ace (this gives the man a winning hand) we will show this on the camera by maybe including some slow motion of the card dropping and the man’s foot covering it.  The next scene is of the cheating man winning, getting up and walking out taking a briefcase with him.  One of the questions we hope to covey is ‘what is in the briefcase?’ this would be good as it adds a lot of tension.  After the cheating man has walked out the man who has lost walks over to the other side of the poker table and see’s the card that was dropped by the man.  The loser shouts for the two guards to chase the man with the briefcase.  After this we were not too sure which way to go, we are either going to have a foot chase or go into the next bit.  The next bit of our thriller in which we are sure about is that as the man with the briefcase is walking past an alleyway a man is going to reach out and grab him and put a bag over his head, at this point we will fade to black and the title of out thriller will appear in white writing.  Just before the title disappears there will be a scream of “help” that will happen and fade out, this will be to add suspense and question’s to our thriller and this will hopefully make the viewer want to watch more   

By Scott Cawkwell